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Tell Me What You Think It Means.

Posted by Fate - June 20th, 2009


Penciled Waterfalls
A man, with the sunrise in his hair,
His brain on the computer screen,
Does little to raise flames from his chair,
A lone voice, in a helmet, goes unseen.

The gates to the long roads seem closed,
With peace as the forgotten destination.
The penciled waterfalls look opposed,
As a dead man will lose the confrontation.

The streaming river of information runs dry;
Only from the failure of drinking, it loses rain.
All eyes see the same goal, afraid to try,
To walk the road alone, is to walk with all but pain.

A frosted looking glass leads the world astray,
The straw, through which we destroy ourselves,
Left a hole in the bed, from where it lay,
Is prized as our destruction, and kept upon the shelves.

Sometimes, it's the desperate that save us all,
As, in their hair, the sun begins to set.
Old, wearied, fallen from walk to crawl,
Our batteries all expire, repaying our only debt.

Colourless Rainbows arc the paper skies,
In the book, forgotten, lying on the floor.
Beyond imagination, the story flies,
Of how peace can exist, it's what we fight for.

By Rion Brodie (Nightbreaker)

Tell me what the words are trying to say, in comment form.
I know what the meaning was for me, as I was writing it, but each person seems to have their own view on it, their own meanings.
that's the beauty of poetry, I suppose.

Also, be sure to watch the Planetoid series, I'm puttering along at getting the fourth one out.
They haven't really had much attention.
That would be awesome, thanks.

Tell Me What You Think It Means.


Comments

Wow that was deep.

thank you.

Obviously the sunshine in his hair means he has blonde hair and he is sitting at his computer playing some kind of video game (cod or haloz or some shit).

Second Stanza something to do with abandoning the idea of convincing peace as if you're dead you can't win a war. The gates could be heaven? Or hell? idk

Third Stanza possibly if you do not "drink from the river of information" meaning if you do not learn, new information cannot be learned. But to try and learn on your own is difficult?

No clue what the fourth means, possibly drugs or alcohol?

Fifth the old save the young? As they were once saved by an older person thus returning the debt and bestowing a new debt onto the saved? (Sun setting in hair possibly grey hair)

Colourless rainbows could be the spector of good and evil? White-grey-black. And the paper skies showing how fragile the world is. 2nd on makes me think it's a past event being told by (idk a war veteran or something) and afterwards the person being told the story thinks alot about it and how peace can come from fighting (which i don't reckon is true but k)

That is really, really good.
Your interpretation is quite nice.
though the blonde hair isn't the case, but you weren't at fault :P

I tried to expand on that in stanza 5, that sunsetting means old, sun rising means young, but it isn't exactly obvious :P

Thanks for your words.

G
A
Y

For those who are not familiar with my intense typography, that says GAY.

P.S. Your dick is tiny.

They have names for people like you. :P
like...'Adam'

"G
A
Y

For those who are not familiar with my intense typography, that says GAY.

P.S. Your dick is tiny."

Wow, you're a faggot.

Oh by the way, the beginning letters of all the lines create an anagram for "A Baa Waistcoat Hid Loot."

Idk, are you against waistcoats made of fleece?

Hahahahahahaha.
haha.
what?
That's ridiculous.
good find, though.
There's also:
I dial to ow a calabash tattoo

It's about computers and technology, apparently.